+ Very good overcharging his 2 "forward" factories. + Nice try, using the opening forced by your commander to get your mantis on his side of the map. + Decent micro, capturing his engineer on the upper isle. + Good Cerberus creep + Very nice bomber strike. I was afraid your bombers might drop their load into the mountain, be aware of that.
- At 2:30 you had your inital factory without a queue - I believe 3 PDs on the upper flank were a bit too much. - You constructed PDs all over the place, but not on your expansion island... - 15:00 You had like a ZILLION idle engineers. - Instead of taking out his expansions and "warning" him about your air power, you should have striked his main base immediatly imho.
BentBlod
+ When he attacked your forward base, it was only logical to use the oppurtunity to counter and solo with your commander as well. + Good reaction when he dropped at your HSC you ordered a transport to drop aid.
- Not good losing your two forward factories. A scout could have revealed his approaching commi, giving your commander and the singl engineer enough time to set up a single PD to repel his solo. - You had 600 mass in storage and +6 income but you didnt upgrade your MEX to t2. - Your position for the coast radar was rather unfortunate. I know this might sound like nitpicking, but by building is right next to the water you will get a little bit more intel, revealing vital parts of both chokes. - DUDE ! You had a frigate ready and didnt utilize is ? MAJOR mistake. - 15:00 You had 6 idle engineers. Right click and patrol ! - You didnt scout your enemies main base and had no idea what he was doing. Build 2-3 airscouts, GO. - You teched up your most vulnerable MEX to t2 while you had t1 ones your main base. huh ? In addition, you had a considerable energy deficit. All in all a very, very bad decision. - Salem ready, but idle... - Even though you saw 15 Renegades taking out your expansion, you didnt immediatly switch your T2 factory to get Bangers.
Note that i mostly stated "bad" things because thats more important that writing down what was done good.
SuperiorX 
a review would be awsome and any advice highly appreciated.